Wordsmith Wednesday (#2)

The objective:
Show us a scene from your current project. It can be creepy, adventurous, romantic, etc. Just a snippet to let readers see what they're in for!

The guidelines:
* Must be from a current work-in-progress (WIP). Nothing already published.
* You may choose from any section of the manuscript, but be mindful not to include spoilers.
 * Keep it clean and YA audience friendly, please. No erotica.
* Stay under 300 words or about one page. It can be as little as a few lines if you prefer. We just want to give readers a chance to see everyone's selection.
* Link back to Chirenjenzie to enjoy others' work as well!

Here's a snippet from my newest WIP, which is still untitled at the moment. It's a MG ghost story. Hope you enjoy it! :)


Movement on the third floor caught his eye. He stopped and looked up, finding Matt now on the third floor, waving once more.
But he wasn’t the only person at the window.
Behind Matt stood an older woman, dressed in a black dress that buttoned all the way to the neck, a delicate brooch at her neck. Her dark hair was pulled back, and her severe eyes were staring holes right into Austin.
A cold chill coursed through Austin, and his mouth hung agape. Matt’s laugh was silenced by the height and panes of glass between them, but he seemed to think that Austin was shocked by his appearance. Matt turned to come back downstairs, and when he did, Austin expected him to run right into the woman.
He didn’t.
Matt walked straight through the woman, whose figure rippled like water, as though a pebble were thrown into the still depths and caused waves. When he’d passed completely through the woman, Matt stopped and turned back to the window once more, confusion clearly displayed on his face. He rubbed his arms as though he were cold, and then disappeared into the room once more, leaving Austin even more confused than before.
Austin closed his eyes and reopened them, assuming he’d imagined the whole thing.
He hadn’t.
When he opened his eyes once more, the woman was standing in the third floor window alone, even more menacing than before. Her teeth were bared, and she looked half-crazy.
Mandy’s voice broke the eerie feeling that still surged through Austin’s veins, and he pulled his eyes from the third floor. “Austin, are you just going to stand on the sidewalk all night?”
He shook his head vehemently, and for a final time, looked to the third floor.
No one was there.

There you have it, folks! What do you think? If you're a writer, take part in the meme, or add a little of your latest WIP to the comments.

Hope everyone is having a great week!

Review: Insanity by Lauren Hammond

Insanity by Lauren Hammond
Release Date: May 8, 2012
Publisher: S.B. Addison Books
Pages: 190
Received: Provided ARC by author in exchange for a fair review
Rating: 5 out of 5 Books

GOODREADS BLURB:
Sometimes love...can drive you crazy. Adelaide Carmichael and Damien Allen couldn't be more opposite. Adelaide's mother abandoned her when she was ten years old, leaving her to be raised by her abusive and alcoholic father. Damien on the other hand came from a wealthy family, was a local celebrity, and seemed to have a bright future ahead of him. Despite their differences, Adelaide and Damien were young, wild, and fiercely in love. And they had a plan. They were going to run away. Be together forever. And their plan was set in motion, until tragedy struck and for some reason, Adelaide wound up in The Oakhill Institution for the insane. Adelaide has no idea what she did to wind up at Oakhill, but she knows one thing for sure... She wants out. And after Damien follows her there to aid her in escaping, Adelaide slowly begins putting together the pieces of her memory that are missing. And it doesn't take Adelaide long to figure out that sometimes... That one true love never dies.



THE GOOD:
Oh my goodness. Oh my goodness. I don't think there was a moment in this book that I could justify putting it down. Ms. Hammond has a way of sucking you in and refusing to let you come up for air. My husband thought I was crazy because I just *had* to read and find out what was going to happen to Adelaide and Damien. Hammond's main character, Adelaide, is instantly understandable and easy to empathize with. You root for her throughout the book, and personally, I was making guesses as to what the next twist was going to be the entire book! I kept guessing, each idea more harebrained than the one before, because I was desperate to unravel Addy's world. It's that chilling, and that emotional of a roller coaster.

THE BAD:
Please remember, this was an ARC, and I have the utmost confidence that my one beef - tense in *very* few spots - has been fixed. It wasn't enough to bother me; it was just a minor blip where I took a second look to make sure I was following the right point of view. Other than that, not one darn thing was there for me to complain about. :)

OVERALL:
This book really is a chilling read that you will want to devour in one sitting. I will say that it is definitely an adult book - something I don't usually read. However, this isn't a bad thing. It is more me giving a heads up to any parents who might read my reviews and assume all my books are for YA. :) Hammond has a way with building the characters and making it feel like you're standing right next to them, sharing in their sorrows and triumphs alongside them. You'll want to hug Addy and punch a couple other characters that you'll meet along the way. :) This is a quick read that will leave you stunned at the end, but in an awesomely good way. I highly recommend it!

RATING: 5 of 5 Books


Teaser Tuesday (#9): Above by Leah Bobet


Teaser Tuesdays is a weekly bookish meme, hosted by MizB of Should Be Reading. Anyone can play along! Just click the following link to see the rules. Without further ado, here are my teasers for the week:

  •  "Atticus's eyes have made grown men cower and run for the sewers."
  • "I was upset the first time, and the fifth - afraid she'd run into the bad things in the sewers or tunnels, that she'd make it Above and get caught by the men in white coats; not afraid enough of what scares Atticus, which is the Whitecoats following her back and finding Safe."

PLEASE LEAVE A COMMENT with either the link to your own Teaser Tuesdays post, or share your ‘teasers’ in a comment here (if you don’t have a blog). Thanks!


Review: Insurgent by Veronica Roth

Divergent by Veronica Roth
Release Date: May 1, 2012
Publisher: Harper Teen
Pages: 525
Received: Purchased
Rating: 4.5 out of 5 Books

GOODREADS BLURB:
One choice can transform you—or it can destroy you. But every choice has consequences, and as unrest surges in the factions all around her, Tris Prior must continue trying to save those she loves—and herself—while grappling with haunting questions of grief and forgiveness, identity and loyalty, politics and love.

Tris's initiation day should have been marked by celebration and victory with her chosen faction; instead, the day ended with unspeakable horrors. War now looms as conflict between the factions and their ideologies grows. And in times of war, sides must be chosen, secrets will emerge, and choices will become even more irrevocable—and even more powerful. Transformed by her own decisions but also by haunting grief and guilt, radical new discoveries, and shifting relationships, Tris must fully embrace her Divergence, even if she does not know what she may lose by doing so.


 
THE GOOD: 
Oh my goodness! Roth seriously knows how to make you turn pages. She has perfectly woven another tale that makes you race to the finish. The ending...wow. That's all I have to say. As for characters, I loved Tris. She wasn't perfect by any means, but that's what made me able to relate with her. The character arc and growth of Christina was probably the one I enjoyed the most. So many characters grow in this book, but Christina really displayed forgiveness and I think that's something that needs to happen more often. Marcus, well, I'm still not sure I like him, but I'm glad that things worked out the way they did with him. :) Roth's world building is exceptional. You see everything she's creating, and it's such a breath of fresh air because it's not overdone. For her, it just seems like a natural affinity. It's great!

THE BAD:
Personally, I didn't like the way that Tobias acted in a good portion of the book, but that could just be me. I thought he acted a bit erratic, but like I said, that's just my personal opinion. It may sound fickle to take a half star for that, but it just really bothered me. Other than that, I loved the book!

OVERALL:
You can't go wrong with Roth's Divergent and Insurgent. They're books that are impossible to put down, so I hope you have the time to sit and read! This has been a series that has captivated me the same way that Hunger Games, Harry Potter, and Twilight did. That's not to say that Divergent & Insurgent are *like* those books (but if you were going to compare, Hunger Games is definitely a logical choice to read if you haven't!), but just that her writing is as powerful and commands attention. I love it, and I think you will, too!

FAVORITE QUOTE:
I clear my throat. "So, this plan. It's kind of stupid, right?"
"It's not...stupid."
"Oh, come on. Trusting Marcus is stupid. Trying to get past the Dauntless at the fence is stupid. Going against the Dauntless and factionless is stupid. All three combined is...a different kind of stupid formerly unheard of by humankind."

* * *

People, I have discovered, are layers and layers of secrets. You believe you know them, that you understand them, but their motives are always hidden from you, buried in their own hearts. You will never know them, but sometimes you decide to trust them.

RATING: 4.5 out of 5 Books

Wordsmith Wednesday (#1)



The objective:
Show us a scene from your current project. It can be creepy, adventurous, romantic, etc. Just a snippet to let readers see what they're in for!


The guidelines:
 * Must be from a current work-in-progress (WIP). Nothing already published.
 * You may choose from any section of the manuscript, but be mindful not to include spoilers.
 * Keep it clean and YA audience friendly, please. No erotica.
 * Stay under 300 words or about one page. It can be as little as a few lines if you prefer. We just want to give readers a chance to see everyone's selection.
 * Link back to Chirenjenzie to enjoy others' work as well!

Here's a snippet from my most recently finshed WIP, Steel Lily. Hope you enjoy it! :)


Running water echoed from the bathroom’s shower, and I cracked the door to try to be heard over the waterfall. “Alice? You okay? Sari said she hadn’t seen you today.”
Still no response. Panic began to set in. It wasn’t like Alice to ignore me. We were the only family we’d had for the past ten years. I stepped into the bathroom to find the fluffy carpet soaked with water, the carpet squelching under my feet as I took three steps toward the shower. True fear settled into my heart with each step; the lavender-scented water that had only this morning made me feel cleaner than ever now made me feel dirty.
Small runlets zigzagged their way down the huge mirrors where steam once was, but had now withered away to residual reminders of the once steaming room. It reminded me of teardrops, and ice filled my veins.
I ripped off my shoes and socks as I reached the shower, where the water cascaded down the small ledge that was adorned with river rocks. I slid the door open, afraid of what I’d find.
It was worse than I could have imagined.
Alice sat crunched up in the corner, her arms wrapped around her knees as she rocked back and forth. A fluffy white towel was now plastered to her body, soaked from the shower head pounding down on her small frame. Her body convulsed with alternating sobs and hiccups, and I panicked.
I got into the shower and got on my hands and knees, completely disregarding my uniform that I still wore. Ice-cold water showered my back and the hairs on my neck stood up as I gasped from the shock of the cold water. I grabbed Alice by the shoulders and shook her. “Alice, Alice! Are you okay? Are you hurt? What happened?”
There was no response, she simply cried with a revitalized strength. If she cried tears, I couldn’t tell. The water streamed down her matted hair and what was this morning a beautiful chignon, was now just a rat’s nest of bobby pins and a bow. She looked up at me and I saw that her careful lines of blue eyeliner now streaked and intermingled with mascara that slid down her soft cheeks, giving her a bruised and battered look.
That wasn’t what scared me, though.
Her once beautiful brown eyes were bloodshot to the point of hardly any white remaining. I pushed myself away in bewilderment, my mouth half open. She hiccupped as she tried to smile through the obvious, overwhelming pain she felt. “I’ve been wearing rose-colored glasses since we got here haven’t I, Avery?”

There you have it, folks! What do you think? If you're a writer, take part in the meme, or add a little of your latest WIP to the comments.

Hope everyone is having a great week!